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After being punished, many criminals continue to commit crimes. Why do some people commit crimes even after having been punished? What measures can be taken to tackle this problem.

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Convicts around the world, face a difficult time adjusting to
society
 after being released from prison.
This
 forces most of them to commit various felonies and
subsequently
 get arrested.Lack of
education
 among
the
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prisoners and the stigma toward criminals in
society
 are the most important reasons for the given problem.Providing employment to the inmates of a jail sans their release and creating awareness among the
people
 about accepting them can go a long way in solving the issue.
Firstly
,the main reason for a felon to commit a crime is a lack of
education
 ,so as to earn a decent living.Without an educational background,one would tend to steal or rob to feed his family.
For instance
,even after a person gets out of jail,he would be left with no other choice,but to commit another crime to survive in the world.
Hence
,the uneducated are more prone to commit crimes even after they are punished.
Secondly
,the
judgement
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 around a person who has been in unlawful activity in spite of repenting is devastating.
Society
 continues to doubt and mistreat a person ,let alone embrace him with open arms ,for his past ,preventing him
to be
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a normal citizen again.
For example
,government jobs are not given to persons who have a history of illegal activity,which leads them to go back to their old habits.
Government
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The government
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 can provide various solutions to educate the inmates of a cell and abolish the stigma toward ex-convicts.
To begin
 with,an in-house university
education
 system can improve the opportunities of many
people
 for employment upon their re-introduction to
the
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society
.
This
 way ,they can have the scholarly requirement for a skilful job.
Furthermore
,ethical background checks for a job can be limited based on their behaviour at work and awareness can be created among fellow colleagues in the workplace, to keep discrimination at bay. To summarise,it is unfortunate that
people
 continue to get themselves in unlawful situations in spite of the consequences.Inadequate
education
 and inappropriate behaviour by others can be crucial in
this
 case.
Therefore
,literacy and acceptance of
such
people
 can go a long way in reducing the number of crimes in the future.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • rehabilitation
  • reintegration
  • recidivism
  • underlying issues
  • support systems
  • criminal networks
  • peer pressure
  • barriers
  • psychological assessment
  • addiction treatment
  • economic factors
  • sentencing
  • data analysis
  • community-based programs
  • restorative justice
  • vocational training
  • social inequalities
  • preventive measures
  • post-release
  • crime cycle
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