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Write about the following topic. Internet social media have become very popular. To what extent do you think this is a good or bad thing? Why do you think this is the case? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should spend about 40 minutes on this task.

#topic #internet #media #case #minutes
There is no doubt that these days, well, In
this
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media
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media
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 a result, it gives them income.
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 it gives them more comfortable work rather than working in
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the store
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. The question is
internet
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whether internet
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 social
media
 have
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 more popular. To what extent make you suppose
this
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essay I am going to discuss my own
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knowledgeable
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. In terms of
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 side, as I mentioned, the communities are working hard in
this
, case and most
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companies
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the companies
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 make apps for societies easier to do
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the assignment
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assignment
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.
Such
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snapchat
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, everyone
are
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 working for
this
,
to
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the future. The main reason given to support
this
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is
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,
as a result
,
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 is easier rather than
instagram
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.
However
, some
of
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the people prefer
instagram
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 and other
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.
In other words
, the community decided what they
whant
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want
that
wheat
. ,
However
, problems, several of the communities are activities around 12 hours
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per
days
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 is are
most
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a most
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 makes many
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in
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on
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 the road. To sum up, it is evident good society and bad society. I prefer to make
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the decision
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decision
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to
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in
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 bad societies,
as a result
, they work almost have
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a day
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 on
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social
media
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 is
horrible
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a horrible
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 thing to do these days. Must ensure steps are taken to prevent
this
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phenomenon
feom
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from
 deteriorating future.
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