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The growth of online shopping will one day lead to all shops in towns and cities closing. Do you agree or disagree.

#growth #shops #towns #cities
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Modern technology has enhanced the marketing industry to a new dimension throughout the
world
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.
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, buying
products
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 from the internet is convenient and accessible to people at all levels of
the
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society. To cater to the
requirement
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requirements
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 shopping outlets,
such
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 as groceries in towns and large multinational retailers have embraced online selling. With the rapid expansion of web shopping, it will lead to the closure of boutiques in towns and cities, and I agree with the above suggestion. The
world
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 wide web has spread to all service industries in the
world
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, and it plays a key role in online shopping.
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 has been done by developing various selling software platforms, where anyone has the opportunity to upload their
products
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 and sell online. One of the best examples is the Alibaba website, which sells millions of
products
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 from around the
world
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 to anyone.
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, many small scale retailers utilizing the platform started small and has become large business vendors.
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, online shops
does
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 not require a physical outlet for buyers to visit and
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vendors
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venders
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vendors
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 to sell
products
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.
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, many small-time businesspeople do not have to spend money on maintaining an outlet.
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, “Daraz”, has become a highly sought after website to purchase a variety of
products
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 in Sri Lanka
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 they do not maintain any
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outlets
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out lets
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 or stores. As the
products
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 are purchased directly the requirement of a store has diminished. In conclusion, it is certain web shopping will be the most common method of ordering goods in the future. With the technological
advancements
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 anything will be available at a touch of a screen and there will be no requirement for outlets.
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, I agree that buying goods online will expand widely and lead to the closure of shops in towns and cities.
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • e-commerce
  • brick-and-mortar
  • physical stores
  • online retailers
  • retail apocalypse
  • digital economy
  • consumer behavior
  • sustainability
  • commercial landscape
  • high-street
  • consumer trends
  • augmented reality
  • showrooms
  • carbon footprint
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