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Nowadays most people read digital books than conventional books. Do you agree or disagree

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Education systems try to improve learning media and
books
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 is the important for start to learning. Nowadays most people read digital
books
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 more than conventional
books
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. In my opinion, I did not agree with
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 notion and I will explain my reason in the following paragraph. On the one hand, Even digital
books
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 or e-
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 have benefits because all peoples have smartphones or iPad that can be reading an e-book.
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, Electronic
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 have comfortable because we do not take a heavy book to go to school or
workplace
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.
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, Electronic
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 are easy to allocate
students
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to students
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 in poor families by the government supports one tablet and capacity book files inside a tablet per student. It bargains a lot of budgets.
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, I found that peoples prefer reading conventional
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 more than electronic
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.
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, People are concentrated on the Thailand book fair that has events every year in March and October.
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, Having authors sign in conventional
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 is still a superb experience for all readers. I
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 collect an author's sign in my
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 history
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.
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, spending too much time in front of computers and smartphones all day has a bad effect on the eyes and raises back problems as well, which can be curbed by limiting their use.
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, I agree that digital writings provide us
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with ease
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 to get ourselves able of gaining a good insight
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into
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 almost anything we want
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apply
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. The Conventional text has its own predominance as it reveals our antiquity.
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