Some people say the main way to be happy in life is to have a lot of money. How might having a lot money make people happy? What other things in life can make people happy?

In the modern
lifestyle
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people
do a variety of
things
to be happy. Almost everything in the present world is based on
money
transactions and some
people
feel happy when they are only wealthy.
Nevertheless
, some other
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society
believe
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that they can be happy without
money
such
as having good friends or living a calm life.
This
will depend on a person’s thinking and
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and the following essay will briefly discuss
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the above. In the present world context, everything is given a value and could be obtained through a transaction.
Therefore
,
people
try to do better jobs or enhance businesses and collect more wealth. Because, when they get a good income, it will assist them to purchase almost anything to their liking and capacity.
For example
, a rich person
such
as the film star Dwayne Johnson has one of the largest luxurious estates in America, whereas a poor farmer from a developing country will not have the
money
even to buy a plot of land for cultivation.
This
shows the buying power of
money
and how it can make a person happy.
On the other hand
, some think that
money
can not bring you total happiness. It is certain that
things
like life, love and care, and mindfulness cannot be purchased. These type of
things
has to come from a
persons
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mind and thinking pattern.
Additionally
, if a man dies even though how much
money
is available for spending
for
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doctors there can be a possibility that person cannot come alive.
Furthermore
, in
Buddhism
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there are many examples
how
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rich
people
who had everything gave up and became a priest to obtain a better life.
Therefore
, it shows that
people
also
find happiness through other
things
rather than wealth. In conclusion,
money
has the ability to purchase many
things
and make
people
happy but for
other segment
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society, there might be
other thing
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another thing
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that makes them happy.
Therefore
, it depends on the persons thinking pattern on what will make them happy.
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  • Financial security
  • Basic needs
  • Comfort
  • Luxury
  • Freedom
  • Altruistic
  • Philanthropy
  • Nurturing relationships
  • Fulfillment
  • Sense of accomplishment
  • Physical well-being
  • Spiritual beliefs
  • Community involvement
  • Gratitude
  • Mindfulness
  • Simple pleasures
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