Some people say the main way to be happy in life is to have a lot of money. How might having a lot money make people happy? What other things in life can make people happy?

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In the modern
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people
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do a variety of
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to be happy. Almost everything in the present world is based on
money
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transactions and some
people
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feel happy when they are only wealthy.
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, some other
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society
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that they can be happy without
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as having good friends or living a calm life.
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will depend on a person’s thinking and
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and the following essay will briefly discuss
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the above. In the present world context, everything is given a value and could be obtained through a transaction.
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,
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try to do better jobs or enhance businesses and collect more wealth. Because, when they get a good income, it will assist them to purchase almost anything to their liking and capacity.
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, a rich person
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as the film star Dwayne Johnson has one of the largest luxurious estates in America, whereas a poor farmer from a developing country will not have the
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even to buy a plot of land for cultivation.
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shows the buying power of
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and how it can make a person happy.
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, some think that
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can not bring you total happiness. It is certain that
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like life, love and care, and mindfulness cannot be purchased. These type of
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has to come from a
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mind and thinking pattern.
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, if a man dies even though how much
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is available for spending
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doctors there can be a possibility that person cannot come alive.
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, in
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there are many examples
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rich
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who had everything gave up and became a priest to obtain a better life.
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, it shows that
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also
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find happiness through other
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rather than wealth. In conclusion,
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has the ability to purchase many
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and make
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happy but for
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society, there might be
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another thing
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that makes them happy.
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, it depends on the persons thinking pattern on what will make them happy.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Financial security
  • Basic needs
  • Comfort
  • Luxury
  • Freedom
  • Altruistic
  • Philanthropy
  • Nurturing relationships
  • Fulfillment
  • Sense of accomplishment
  • Physical well-being
  • Spiritual beliefs
  • Community involvement
  • Gratitude
  • Mindfulness
  • Simple pleasures
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