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There is too much noise in many public places in cities. What are the causes of this problem? What can be done to solve the problem?

#noise #places #cities
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Increasing
noise
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pollution
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 is a big
problem
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 in many cities that involve the expansion of the human population in economic cities.
People
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 prefer to live in economic cities for reasons of
education
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 and occupation. It is undoubtedly that the public
places
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 have crowded
people
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 face a
problem
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 with
noise
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pollution
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such
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 as public parks, playgrounds, sports stadiums and marketplace.
This
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noise
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pollution
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 in public
places
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 in the
city
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 and will show some solutions. The main cause of the
noise
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problem
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 in many countries of
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 world from the human population increase.
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, when the economic system progresses faster than in past,
people
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 move to live in a big
city
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 or an economic
city
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 for their careers and their children’s
education
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 that crowded
people
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 in the crowded
city
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 make
noise
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pollution
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 in public
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.
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,
people
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 move away from their hometown to a big
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 and mostly live in rental houses or rental apartments and they share public
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 in society.
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, in some ,cultures
people
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 speak louder when they communicate with others
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 as Chinese
people
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 speak louder in every situation no matter what they go because in their culture is regular traditional.
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, traffic problems are involved
noise
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pollution
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 from various vehicles
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 as motorcycles, buses, heavy trucks and
cars
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 on the road.
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, when a driver starts an engine makes some
noise
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. In fact,
noise
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 from many
cars
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 on the road can make environmental
pollution
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. To solve the
noise
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problem
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, there are several things that government can do.
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,
education
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 policy is teaching young children about rule of law and manners in public
places
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. The state government should use legal control of
noise
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pollution
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 in public
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.
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, we can give cultural advice.
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, families should teach their children about social values and the basis of manners.
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, the government can support
people
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 to use green energy
cars
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 as tax refund for
people
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 who buy electric
cars
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 because the
cars
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 that use green energy reduce
noise
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pollution
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. It can be seen that
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 we have many solutions to do which can solve the
noise
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problem
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 in public
places
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such
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 as
education
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 policy, legal control of
noise
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pollution
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 in public
places
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 and tax refunds. So every part of society should take action in any events to save our environment.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • noise pollution
  • urbanization
  • population density
  • traffic congestion
  • infrastructure development
  • public announcement systems
  • street performances
  • noise regulations
  • soundproof materials
  • public transportation
  • designated quiet zones
  • green spaces
  • buffer zones
  • public awareness
  • community efforts
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