At present time the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults compared with the number of old people.

Nowadays, it has been reformed the proportions of citizens in many countries in aspects of age. The diversity among aged and young
people
is unequal,
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with
the latter category
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higher. The issue is controversial and there are both positive and negative aspects. Personally, I support that the
aformentioned
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phenomenon is beneficial for
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society,
although
both points will be
dicussed
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discussed
in
this
essay. On the one hand, a
state
, which is generally consisted of young persons, spends
fewer
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amount of money
in
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retirement plans. More particular,
people
after the age of 60 are forced to quit their jobs and live through receiving from the
state
part of their
securancy
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security
income. As a consequence,
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has to be prepared to cover via an enormous budget the needs of elderly
people
.
This
is can be clearly indicated by the
last
financial report of the Greek
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of Economics proving that 32% of the
anual
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annual
budget of the country is required for the pensioners.
On the other hand
, a country with a plethora of young
people
suffers from high unemployment. Indeed, young
people
have to fend for themselves and apply for a job after their studies. Due to the high
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offer
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, there are limited opportunities and the
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of jobs are totally underpaid.
For example
, in
Argetina
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Argentina
, which is the country with the highest percentage of youngsters in the world, the unemployment rate is about 36%, since young
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have to
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for
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the retirement of elder employees in order to get an occupation. In conclusion,
although
the
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percentages of a population cannot be manipulated, I insist on the superiority of a community, which's majority is included
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youngsters.
However
, the caring
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elderly
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has
no
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to be neglected in any case.
Therefore
, the
state
should organise a systematic strategy in order
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citizen could be
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member of
the
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society.
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