Some people think that it is better to educate boys and girls in separate schools. Others, however, believe that boys and girls benefit more from attending mixed schools. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

I believe that

boys

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and

girls

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benefit more from attending mixed

schools

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apply

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than

the

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from the

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educate

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educated

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in separate

schools

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Firstly

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, the concept ''

boys

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and

girls

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in separate

schools

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'' itself is weird, since it is

borning

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widening

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the gap between

women

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and

man

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gender

what

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in not

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not in

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good

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a good

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positon

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in our

country

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. The main disadvantage is that

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and

girls

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will not have the experience in communication skills with each

others

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other

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, it

force

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forces

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think "why

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are we

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in separate

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?" and it creates the

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that we are different. I mean, we do not need to separate the

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and

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, since it

borns

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the stereotypes about gender and sex, the questions like "who is stronger and smarter" will be raised more and more in our society. In opposite, when

girls

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and

boys

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will

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are

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educate

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educated

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together

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togher,

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it will show them that they are equal. Obviously, it depends on the school culture and teachers, how they

make

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create the atmosphere between the pupils.

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, it depends on the children's parents and the

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country

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culture in general. But

unfornutately

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unfortunately

, even the common classes do not make

our

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proper

atittude

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attitude

to each other, since we have strong

issue

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issues

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with discrimination between

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and men in different fields, from simple routine questions "who

need

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to cook or sit with kids" to "can

the

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women

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be equal

opponent

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president

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or warrior?" I think

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such

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kind of

schools

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can be harmful. From our

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country

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perspective, it can just harm

already our

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our already

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weak system.

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, we as a society are growing now in

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this

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these

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questions, but

such

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kind

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kinds

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schools

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can

stuck

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us, or even pull us back.

To sum up

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, I

belive

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that

such

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kind of

the

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apply

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schools

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are the

worse

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worst

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idea for every

country

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, especially for

our

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ours

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. It

break

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breaks

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the children's

imagine

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imagination

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that

women

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and men have

same

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the same

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rules,

feeling

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feelings

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favors

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etc

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, etc

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. It

biuld

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builds

the barriers and

make

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makes

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the stereotypes like we already have.

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Jun 7, 2022

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overall

To do better, add more easy but clear ideas and more links to show why you say what you say. Try to show both sides with calm tone.

structure

Fix the plan. Have one idea in each paragraph. Start with a short idea. Then give a small example. End with a short line that sums up.

introduction/conclusion

Make your start clear. Say your view in the first sentence and keep it in the end as a line of view.

content

Give more proof for your point. Short example from life or country. Do not just say, give a fact or idea.

grammar

Check grammar and spelling a lot. Use simple form and correct mistakes. Use the 's' for plural, 'are', 'is', etc.

coherence

Use clear linking words: also, but, however, for example, in addition, on the other hand.

content

The writer shows a clear view that mixed schools are better.

content

Some good ideas on how single sex schools may keep bias in work or talk.

structure

The essay has more than one paragraph and a view line.

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Sentence 4 - Outline sentence

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Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
Sentence 2 - Example
Sentence 3 - Discussion
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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

6 paragraphs

322 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

co-education
gender segregation
peer pressure
academic performance
gender stereotypes
discrimination
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