Many species of animals all around the world are on the verge of extinction. Some say that countries and individuals should protect these animals from dying out, while others say that we should concentrate more on the problems of human beings. Discuss both viewpoints and give your opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Over the
last
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century, many habitats are destroyed due to urbanization. Some environmental activists claim that policymakers should consider the extinction of
species
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of
animals
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as a topmost priority;
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, In my perspective, governments should focus on the other major challenges of human beings
such
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as human
health
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and environmental pollution. On the one hand, one cannot deny that the extinction of
animals
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is gradually
increased
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due to deforestation and urbanization which may
lends
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to
destroy
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entire
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the entire
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ecosytem
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ecosystem
ecosystems
. To explain
further
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, every living
beings
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in
this
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world is an inter-dependent,
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depreciation of any
species
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imbalance
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the ecosystem which leads to greater consequences.
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,
carvniorous
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carnivorous
animals
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depends
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on other
animals
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for their food the deprecation of some
animals
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leads to feeding
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for them.
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balanced
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ecosytem
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ecosystem
,
undoutedly
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undoubtedly
, every
individuals
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is responsible to save
species
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from risk.
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,
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saving some
animals
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from
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extinction is required but might not be a priority when considering concerning
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like
health
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and environmental
issues
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. Across the
globe
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many citizens do not have an access to
multifacility
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multi facility
multi-facility
hospitals.
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,
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South African
countries
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country's
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citizens
has
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to cross their
nation
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borders to get
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proper treatment, due to poverty, which cannot be possible for everyone.
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to
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, authorities and organizations must spend their funds to reduce pollution by investing
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environmental conservation which indirectly contributes to
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and
preserve
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natural habitats.
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, to recapitulate, the destruction of rare
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is
a
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one of the major
issues
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to be addressed to keep
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the ecosystem
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balanced and save them for
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next
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the next
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generations.
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, when compared to other major
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, I strongly believe other major
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such
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health
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as health
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and pollution take
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topmost priority.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • verge of extinction
  • endangered species
  • ecological importance
  • biodiversity
  • ethical duty
  • ecosystems
  • medical and scientific research
  • ecotourism
  • limited availability of resources
  • socioeconomic issues
  • sustainable development
  • conservation efforts
  • preserve biodiversity
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