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Influence of human beings on the world's ecosystem is leading to the extinction of species and loss of biodiversity.what solution can you suggest?

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Human activity
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 the environment is known to have irreversible consequences. Human impact on nature leads to the
extinction
 of animals and the disruption of the ecological chain. The question is what we can change in our behaviour today to prevent
this
 disaster. The two main causes of
species
extinction
 are changes
of
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 their habitats and
pollution
. Environmental
pollution
 is one of the most pressing issues in today's society.
Pollution
 negatively changes the flow of energy,
the
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 chemical constitution of the environment. Nowadays tonnes of heavy chemicals are released into the air, upsetting the balance of the surroundings. There
being
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 polluted air and poisoned land, so animals are forced to find new homes, wandering from one area to another. Because of that, a lot of
species
 are dying out.
In other words
, human activities often deplete local flora and fauna and cause a loss of biodiversity. Despite all
this
, we still have a chance to save the animals world from
extinction
. In my point of view, we should commence by informing the general population about the dangers of
this
 problem. 
For instance
, it is possible to conduct environmental classes in schools and universities to raise awareness among the younger generation. Only by working together humanity will be able to achieve a positive effect.
In addition
 to that, everyone can contribute today by refusing to use plastic, which pollutes the habitat and by adhering to eco-friendly products.
This
 way, we will cope with
pollution
, which leads to the
extinction
 of
species
 and loss of biodiversity. To conclude, human behaviour negatively affects the balance in nature,
nevertheless
, humanity still has a chance to fix everything, and
therefore
 we are obliged to use
this
 opportunity. I surely believe that the future generation would have an opportunity to see all the diversity of
species
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • ecosystem
  • extinction
  • biodiversity
  • deforestation
  • urbanization
  • contamination
  • overexploitation
  • global warming
  • climate change
  • non-native
  • safeguard
  • eco-friendly
  • sustainable
  • legislation
  • rehabilitation
  • endangered species
  • conservation
  • environmental impact
  • sustainability
  • biodiversity loss
  • ecological balance
  • sanctuary
  • environmental degradation
  • policy implementation
  • wildlife protection
  • ecotourism
  • biodiversity conservation
  • ecological footprint
  • sustainable development
  • pollinator decline
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