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The Philippine population is increasing. Do you agree that this is a lack of knowledge in using contraception?

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The chart depicts the proportion of boys and girls who were overweight. The study was conducted in Australia between the years 1980 and 2010. Overall, females recorded the lowest number from the start and ended in the same rank. Meanwhile, males obtained the highest and remains at the peak in the end. It commenced in 1980 when females got more than 30% of the total overweight individuals in Australia. It steadily increased in the succeeding 2 years and it shows in the data that it reached a peak of above 50% of the population in the
year
 2010. With regard to the male gender, the overweight numbers started at 40% in the
year
 1980 and followed by approximately 48% in 1990. It reaches its highest point in the
year
 2000 at above 60%.
Moreover
, in the
last
year
 in the data which is the
year
 2010 the proportion declined to 60%.
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