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some people like to try new things for example, places to visit and types of food. Other people prefer to keep doing things they are familiar with. Discuss both these atttitudes and give your opinion.

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Some
people
 like to try new
things
,
for example
, places to visit and types of
food
. Other
people
 prefer to keep doing
things
 they are familiar with. Discuss both these attitudes and give your opinion. At present,
people
 are more adventurous and like to try out new
things
such
 as travelling to other countries and enjoying various
food
. On the other ,hand some are hesitant to experiment with novel
things
.
Therefore
 they try to live within their comfort zone. I think travelling and enjoying
food
 in different cities is one of the best decisions one can make in
life
 ,
Nevertheless
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 it is important to be mindful when visiting new cultures to avoid
life
-threatening issues. To start with, in the global context
people
 get to know about other countries and it is natural to have a keen desire to explore them. Many
such
 travellers enjoy different cuisines and have immense fun. For
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instant, I was astonished to learn hospitality of
people
 in Dubai, during my vacation a few months ago.
Also
, I cherished street
food
 in India on another visit.
Such
 excursions provide an understanding of various cultures and to learn how
people
 live in various parts of the globe.
On the other hand
, some
people
 like to stay within a safe zone without risking their
lives
 and money. They are satisfied with what they eat and the
people
 they associate with. In fact,
such
 folk do not want to risk their
lives
 trying out new
things
. Whilst experiencing anything for the
first
 time could involve certain risks everyone has to be careful not to put their
lives
 in danger.
For example
, a recent newspaper article highlighted an incident about a group of young
people
 who endangered their
lives
 in a forest in Africa.
However
, challenges teach lessons in
life
 and coming out of the safe zone gives many opportunities. In conclusion, I would say exploring new cultures are fascinating and provide a rhythm to
life
 whereas
people
 have to be mindful of what they do.
Also
, routine tasks make
life
 bored and travelling gives fun and enjoyment.
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