A friend you made while you were studying abroad has written to ask you for help in finding a job in your company. You have heard about a job in a local company that might be suitable for him/her. Write a letter to this friend. In your letter Tell your friend about the job and what sort of work it involves Say why you think the job would be suitable for him/ her Explain how to apply for the job

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Dear Zoe, I am writing

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letter in

order

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you to know a vacant job which is a junior post for

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the fiber

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fiber

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planning department in my company and I think you might be fit

this

role.

Frist

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and foremost, since

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post is for

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planning, job scopes

such

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routing generating,

attending

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to site

survey

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will be involved.

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, you may need to coordinate with

customer

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and sub-contractors regarding

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fiber

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installation. In

additional

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, reporting

daily

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work process of the orders to associate managers and other tasks assigned by managers will be involved.

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there are a lot of responsibilities that you may need to do,

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post is open for

entry level

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and seniors will give the training about the tasks.

Therefore

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role is appropriate for you since you don’t have work experience and you can learn about not only the task but

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onsite experience. I would like to suggest you apply directly

form

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company

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carrier website

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of applying from other employment agencies. I am looking forward to hearing good news

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you and good luck. Warm Regards Sandar Myint

Submitted by sandarmyint740 on Wed Jun 08 2022

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18Grammar mistakes
 

8 paragraphs

186 words

6.00

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Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

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