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With increasing use and development of new technology, many machines are now able to do the work which people used to perform . what are the advantages and disadvantages of this trend.

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In the modern
world
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 problem requires
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modern
 solution. As the innovative techniques are taking down human resource
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shortage
shortages
 issue are
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appreciable
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Moreover
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 it can bring
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demerits
 to few
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 of
people
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 and merits for most of the population.
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 and foremost, no use of technology would bring
world
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 to the old age, where
people
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 used to do
repetative
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repetitive
task
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 as they did not have any other option. Nowadays not only
machines
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 are
effeciently
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efficiently
 doing the
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repetitive
reparative
 task with less human intervention but
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 leaving an opportunity for humans to focus on
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next
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 level of
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. Especially,
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agriculture
 and farming methods are improved due to
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advancements
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 in tools used by farmers to grow and cultivate
thier
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their
 crops.
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, drones helping in irrigation and monitoring of crops would be a huge
releif
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relief
 for farmers.
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, it is creating an
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unemployment
employment
 scenario for
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 segments.
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Furthermore
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 the
machines
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 are working
effeciently
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efficiently
 without making any
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errors
error
, resulting in
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the layoff
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 of
people
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 who
does
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 not have any particular skill to survive.
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, if heavy goods can be taken by
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a few
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 automated
machines
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 from one place to
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another place
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 in
warehouse
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a warehouse
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, why would
company
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a company
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 hire any labour to do so. The biggest example today is Amazon, they have robots who shuffle and sort their delivery packages. In conclusion,
machines
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 will get more innovative in
future
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the future
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people
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 need to put hand in hand with technology by enhancing their skills, because
machines
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 can not build new
machines
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 but
human
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the human
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 brain can do build anything.

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Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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