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Parents put a lot of pressure on children to succeed. Do you think this is a good or bad thing? Discuss both views and give your opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own experience or knowledge.

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Children
's future is one of the major concerns of their parents,
consequently
, they can burn their
children
 out.
Although
this
 pressure comes out of care and love, I am completely against it, as it can be an obstacle that prevents their ambitions of being successful. Pushing our
children
 to be successful all the time is an unhuman pattern. It can affect their mental health stability, to the extent, that they may harm or even kill themselves. As an example, the highest percentage of committing suicide is among Indian university students, as they are struggling with the mindset of their parents and community of majoring in difficult fields,
however
; they are not interested in them.
As a result
, they barely accommodate their life because of stress.
In addition
, students’ self-confidence is affected by criticism negatively. Much research confirmed that commenting on your
children
's successful spots has a constructive impact on their self-assurance.
In contrast
, pinpointing their failed trials will destroy their confidence. Some people argue that the only youngster’s motivation is reprimanding. Due to
this
 fact, assertiveness and pressure are necessary to avoid spoiling and keep motivation toward success. They justify their argument by giving an example of, the restricted bad-treated schools often graduate hardworking and clever students.
Conversely
, I disagree with them, because intimate treatment especially from the parent’s side helps young people to figure out their preferences.
Therefore
 they will be self-motivated and successful. Parents held their
children
 the responsibility of guaranteeing a bright future. As a consequence, they overburden them immensely.
Although
 spoiling young people can make them irresponsible, understanding and
supporting
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support
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will guide them to be not only successful but
also
 happy.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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