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Some people think that social networking sites have a huge negative impact on both individuals and society. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, social
media
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 becomes more and more important in our daily
life
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, and some
people
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 believe that these social networking applications bring a massive bad impact on both
people
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 and society. I agree that social
media
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 has some negative influences, but they
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 have some advantages to human
life
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. On the one hand, recently, most
people
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 have more than one social networking application on their mobile phones and tablets, and the
time
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people
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 spend on those social websites has increased significantly than before.
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 situation means many
people
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 may waste their
time
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 on unnecessary social activities on the Internet and not spend enough
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 improving themselves,
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 as studying or exercising.
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, social
media
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 can impact
people
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’s minds.
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, many celebrities usually post their skinny bodies or luxurious
lives
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 on Internet, and these pictures and videos encourage
people
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 to pursue unhealthy
lives
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 or have incorrect attitudes about money. If many
people
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 waste
time
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 and have wrong attitudes about their
lives
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 due to social
media
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, it will become a social problem in the future.
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, social networking sites still bring our
life
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 many advantages.
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, when we lose contact with our old friends, we can use social
media
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 to find them.
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, social networking sites let us know
people
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 who have different
lives
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 from us and enhance our knowledge about
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 world. In conclusion, I think that the overuse of social networking sites in daily
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 is harmful to
people
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 and society.
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, if we use them correctly and control the
time
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 we spend, these applications and websites are beneficial.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • social isolation
  • virtual interactions
  • mental health
  • feelings of inadequacy
  • anxiety
  • depression
  • misinformation
  • destabilize
  • privacy concerns
  • data breaches
  • productivity
  • foster connections
  • educational content
  • social activism
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