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Living in a country where you have to speak a foriegn language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words.

#country #foriegn #language
People
 roam around the world for
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a purpose
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purpose
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purposes
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 whether it is for Education, Business, family gatherings, etc.
People
 must know the
language
 to communicate with other
people
. some say it can cause serious social and practical problems. I lean towards disagreement
of
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 the statement by emphasising
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the key points with appropriate examples.
To begin
 with,
people
 nowadays do not want
stay
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to stay
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 in one
country
 due to
the
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business and educational purposes. Before
arrival
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,arrival
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 they ensure that they know and understand the particular
language
.
Furthermore
, travelling to another
country
 requires visa approval in which the immigration officials test their knowledge in written and verbal.
For instance
, The student who got admission
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to
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prestigious
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a prestigious
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 college
of
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in
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 Canada for
masters
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master's
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have
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 to prove his
english
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English
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language
 proficiency by giving an exam in order to meet the guidelines as per the university rules. It is better to learn at the early stage to avoid the hyper at the time of arrival to the
country
.
Secondly
, one who is going to learn
the
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foriegn
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foreign
language
 will likely undergo through various situations where they have to deal with serious social problems. there are several devices which can translate
in
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native
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the native
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language
 to understand the problem. Most of the time, concerns are regarding the behaviour and living standards that do not match with the
poeple
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people
 living there.
Hence
, foreigners have to stick to the rule
on
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 order to be
co-operative
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cooperative
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 and follow the culture
that
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to avoid hampering their religion.
For example
, a festival called '
haloween
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Halloween
' celebrated in
america
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America
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have
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has
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their
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its
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 own rules in terms of
dress-code
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dress code
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 and the behaviour. If a person
do
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 not have the costume, is not eligible to attend the party. In conclusion, Adapting
in
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to
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different
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a different
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environment
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environments
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, the person has to go through different phases, it will be difficult at
first
 but eventually get
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use
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 to it. The
country
 with the distinct culture and
language
 adheres to the living standards that cannot be changed for
convenience
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the convenience
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 of one person.
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