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Some people think governments should spend money on measures to save languages with few speakers from dying out completely. Others think this is a waste of financial resources. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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People hold contrasting opinions in terms of whether the government should invest in
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the protection
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 of
minority
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language
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languages
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. For my part, while there might be arguments supporting that it is wasteful to protect them, I tend to believe
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 action can be more beneficial for us. On the one hand, I think the government should try to preserve the languages that are not widely spoken. A
language
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 has a vital connection with the cultural identity of
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 who
are speak
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 it. In
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 sense, if one
minority
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language
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 disappears due to the lack of concerns, the distinctive ways of life
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associated with it will go extinct. Take China as an example, with the popularity of the mandarin, the minorities who live in the mountain for generations have to give up their dialect to have access to acquire education. As a consequence, thousands of
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 languages and villages have vanished over the past few decades as the culture came to an end.
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, it can be argued that it is pointless to save these dialects. It is better for different races of people to speak the same
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, as it will facilitate
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communication and understanding. In view of
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, the administration can save expenditure on
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 management as it is not a progressive effort, and mitigate the
language
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 barriers of the nation.
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, I think it will create a sad world, in which dominant cultural values force the minorities who will realize
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 struggling to find themselves. To conclude, I reckon that the government should concern and spend money on
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 issue, which can lead to
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innovation and prosperity.
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