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​In developing countries, children in rural communities have less access to education. Some people believe that the problem can be solved by providing more schools and teachers, while other think that the problem can be solved by providing computers and internet access. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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The table below shows the scale of the resident in Denmark in 2012 by category of accommodation. It is noticeable that the green
park
area
 gains popularity of
terrace
house
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houses
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, while most of the citizens are willing to live in
terrace
house
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houses
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 and
bungalows
 in
central
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the central
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area
.
Moreover
,
population
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the population
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 tend to prefer
bungalows
 in
central
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the central
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park
area
. According to the table data, 75% of the
houses
 in
green
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the green
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park
area
 were
terrace
houses
; the figure for detached
houses
 was lower, and the semi-detached
house
 and
bungalows
 were
lowest
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, at 5%. The two most common
houses
 in
central
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the central
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area
 are
terrace
houses
 and
bungalows
 with 45% and 35% respectively. 15% of the people
lived
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who lived
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 in
this
area
 were in semi-detached
houses
 and the remaining 5% types of
houses
 were detached
houses
. In 2012, 65% of the
houses
 in
central
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the central
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park
area
 were
bungalows
, while the
second largest
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second-largest
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 portion of the variety was
terrace
house
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houses
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.
By contrast
, the semi-detached
houses
 and detached
houses
 were
smallest
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the smallest
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,
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 and were equally distributed
the
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in the
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last
 10% of the central
park
area
.
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