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The pie charts below show units of electricity production by fuel source in Australia and France in 1980 and 2000.

The pie charts below show units of electricity production by fuel source in Australia and France in 1980 and 2000.
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The pie charts compare the production of
electricity
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 (in
units
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) from five different fuel sources in Australia and France between 1980 and 2000.
Overall
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, the total
electricity
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 production increased in both countries by the end of the period.
While
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 Australia increased its use of coal, nuclear power became the main source of
electricity
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 in France in the end. Starting with Australia, the total
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units
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number of units
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 produced increased from 100 in 1980 to 170 in 2000. Its use of coal increased substantially from being half of the energy sources to
accounting
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 for roughly 75% of the sources used.
Similarly
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, the
electricity
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 produced from hydropower went up from 20 to 36
units
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. Meanwhile, both natural gas and oil witnessed a significant decline from 20 and 10
units
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, respectively, to 2
units
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 each. In regards to France, which doubled its total
units
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, it started generating
electricity
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 from nuclear power in 1980, starting with 15
units
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 to rise by 111
units
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 in 2000.
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, the
electricity
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 produced from oil increased by 5
units
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, and the
units
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 of coal used remained the same. Both natural gas and hydropower have become insignificant by 2000.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 80%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words electricity, units with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Electricity production
  • Fuel source
  • Renewable sources
  • Non-renewable sources
  • Significant change
  • Evolved
  • Dominant source
  • Introduction of new sources
  • Reliance
  • Electricity production mix
  • Environmental implications
  • Future trend
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