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The growth of the online shopping will one day lead to all shops in towns and cities closing. Do you agree or disagree?

#growth #shops #towns #cities
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increasing
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of
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 online shopping might
impact
on
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the way
the
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society
buy
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buys
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 things. Nowadays, the number of digital markets is twice
as
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the amount of physical
stores
. In order to that, some
people
 are worried that in a few years we will
experiencing
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 a lack of shops in towns and cities.
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A
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 part of that prediction, I disagree that online shopping will be
the
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 unique form to purchase goods.
Firstly
, the culture of buying things in a non-digital way is consolidated all over the world. Some
people
 might go shopping in order to have leisure
,
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when
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 others prefer to go physically
at
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 the store to try things.
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The specialist
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Specialist
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 would agree that for some
people
buy
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 from a
tipacally
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typically
 place should be easier and an
enterteriment
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entertainment
 time to deserve.
Besides
 the amount of online purchasing is
growning
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growing
, it will never
repleced
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replace
replaced
 the
standart
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standard
 form.
Secondly
, the
impact
 on
economy
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the economy
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 should be overwhelming.
For instance
, dealing with
less
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stores
, in a physical way, would decrease the number of jobs.
Also
, the taxes that are given to the
governament
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government
 when
people
 buy stuff will reduce significantly. Most important, is to recognize that some policies
already
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 been publicized to guarantee the
sustaintability
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sustainability
 of malls and
stores
 with is located in town.
Consequently
, the
decisions-makers
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 would not
allowed
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allow
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 the
exctintion
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extinction
 of
the
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physical shopping. In conclusion, the two aspects that were shown, the culture and the economic
impact
,
is
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 the main reasons
for
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in the future the online
shopps
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shoppes
shops
 wouldn´t have
the
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 enormous
impact
 on
stores
.
Therefore
, I disagree that towns and
cities
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cities'
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 shopping will
closing
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close
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 in the future,
however
, the number of online options is rapidly increasing.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • e-commerce
  • brick-and-mortar
  • physical stores
  • online retailers
  • retail apocalypse
  • digital economy
  • consumer behavior
  • sustainability
  • commercial landscape
  • high-street
  • consumer trends
  • augmented reality
  • showrooms
  • carbon footprint
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