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The growth of online shopping will one day lead to all shops in towns and cities closing. Do you agree or disagree?

#growth #shops #towns #cities
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The increase in online shopping might
impact
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 the way society buys things. Nowadays, the number of digital markets is twice the amount of physical
stores
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. In order to that, some
people
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 are worried that in a few years we will experience a lack of shops in towns and cities. As part of that prediction, I disagree that online shopping will be a unique form to purchase goods.
Firstly
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, the culture of buying things in a non-digital way is consolidated all over the world. Some
people
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 might go shopping in order to have leisure while others prefer to go physically to the store to try things. Specialists would agree that for some
people
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 buying from a
typically
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 place should be easier and an entertainment time to deserve. Despite
of
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the amount of online purchasing
is
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growing, it will never replace the standard form.
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, the
impact
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 on the economy should be overwhelming.
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, dealing with fewer
stores
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, in a physical way, would decrease the number of jobs.
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, the taxes that are given to the government when
people
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 buy stuff will reduce significantly. Most important, is to recognize that some policies have already been publicized to guarantee the sustainability of malls and
stores
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 with is located in town.
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, the decision-makers would not allow the extinction of physical shopping. In conclusion, the two aspects that were shown, the culture and the economic
impact
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, are the main reasons in the future the online shops wouldn´t have an enormous
impact
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 on
stores
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.
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, I disagree that towns and
cities
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cities'
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 shopping will close in the future,
however
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, the number of online options is rapidly increasing.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • e-commerce
  • brick-and-mortar
  • physical stores
  • online retailers
  • retail apocalypse
  • digital economy
  • consumer behavior
  • sustainability
  • commercial landscape
  • high-street
  • consumer trends
  • augmented reality
  • showrooms
  • carbon footprint
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