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In Britain, when someone gets old they often go to live in a home with other old people where there are nurses to look after them. Sometimes the government has to pay for this care. Who do you think should pay for this care, the government or the family? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience

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Since time immemorial, age has played a role in determining an individual mode or way of livelihood. There is an ongoing argument that payment of old
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 who live with other old
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 in a home where there are nurses to take
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 of them should be done by the authority, in Britain.
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 essay will take an exhaustive look at the power of paying for the
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 of the aged with relevant examples. One of the reasons why the authority should be responsible for their well-being is the fact that these human beings are vulnerable
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 who need help. Many of these aged
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 are between the age of 50years and above and are already less active.
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, there are diseases that come with old age which can not be totally eradicated but can be managed,
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 as sicknesses
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 dementia. Undoubtedly, these entities deserve to be taken
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 of by the authority with full responsibility.
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, these persons have contributed to nation-building through their taxes. They have paid for their taxes and other statutory deductions while they were still in their various job positions or before retirement which has helped to solve various governmental problems. For,instance as a civil servant of Britain, there are percentages accrued to the law and must be remitted monthly or quarterly, ,
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 should be an opportunity for the upper chambers to compensate them. Looking through all odds these human beings have been of great impact to the community while they were agile. Conclusively, the impact of these humans, while they were agile, has contributed to the nation-building, their present disabled condition has made them vulnerable and proper
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 is needed to be offered. Invariably their relatives or family should be allowed to take
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 of them if they want to carry out that function but the government's
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 way of compensating these men is by paying for their well-being and state of sanity.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Aging population
  • Elderly care
  • Nursing homes
  • Social welfare
  • Intergenerational responsibility
  • Caregiving
  • Financial burden
  • Quality of life
  • Pension funds
  • Healthcare policy
  • Taxation
  • Subsidies
  • Private insurance
  • Long-term care
  • Sustainability
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