Some cultures appear to give preference to older people than younger people while other cultures seem to prefer the younger generation. Which do you think is better? Discuss including examples from your own knowledge and experience.

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Some cultures appear to give preference to older
people
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over younger
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while other cultures seem to prefer the younger generation. In my opinion, as I live in
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social culture, I did not agree with
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concept and I will discuss my reason in the following paragraph. Thai social
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proud of the moral that good juveniles should be grateful to senior
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.
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,
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should feel grateful to all elderly
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beginning in a nuclear family (parents, grandparents) to the Monarchy.
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, I think
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has a lot of problems.
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, Thai law acts in the civil and commercial
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in article 1453 that "
children
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cannot sue parents in criminal or civil cases".
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, In real-life not all parents take care of
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with a velvet glove. Nowadays, It appears in a news as a stepfather raping
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but the mother not had action against the stepfather and not helped the daughter.
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, I found
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case
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cannot sue a mother who ignored when stepfather's breaking the law and violent her daughter. Because suing a mother is false to morals.
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,
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culture makes bad elderly
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continue doing wrong things because younger
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cannot be brave to criticize and reprimand.
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, If elderly
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governor officials want to construct
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project. Young
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who see a mistake cannot be brave to debate and a lot of projects was failed because of egotism in elderly
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. In conclusion from my opinion, I believe
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concept that elderly peoples are smart and have experienced more than younger
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is outdated and cannot develop the country in the true ways.
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, We should respect human rights together and cancel the morals worship someone group.
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • elders
  • decision-makers
  • continuity
  • stability
  • innovative
  • entrepreneurs
  • societal progress
  • mentorship
  • intergenerational
  • experience and wisdom
  • traditional values
  • social unity
  • extended family systems
  • technological adoption
  • dynamic workforce
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