Some cultures appear to give preference to older people than younger people while other cultures seem to prefer the younger generation. Which do you think is better? Discuss including examples from your own knowledge and experience.

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Some cultures appear to give preference to older

people

over younger

people

while other cultures seem to prefer the younger generation. In my opinion, as I live in

this

social culture, I did not agree with

this

concept and I will discuss my reason in the following paragraph. Thai social

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proud of the moral that good juveniles should be grateful to senior

people

Accordingly

Children

should feel grateful to all elderly

people

beginning in a nuclear family (parents, grandparents) to the Monarchy.

However

, I think

this

has a lot of problems.

Firstly

, Thai law acts in the civil and commercial

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in article 1453 that "

children

cannot sue parents in criminal or civil cases".

However

, In real-life not all parents take care of

children

with a velvet glove. Nowadays, It appears in a news as a stepfather raping

children

but the mother not had action against the stepfather and not helped the daughter.

Accordingly

, I found

this

case

children

cannot sue a mother who ignored when stepfather's breaking the law and violent her daughter. Because suing a mother is false to morals.

Secondly

This

culture makes bad elderly

people

continue doing wrong things because younger

children

cannot be brave to criticize and reprimand.

For example

, If elderly

people

governor officials want to construct

this

project. Young

people

who see a mistake cannot be brave to debate and a lot of projects was failed because of egotism in elderly

people

. In conclusion from my opinion, I believe

this

concept that elderly peoples are smart and have experienced more than younger

people

is outdated and cannot develop the country in the true ways.

Accordingly

, We should respect human rights together and cancel the morals worship someone group.

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Some cultures appear to give preference to older people than younger people while other cultures seem to prefer the younger generation. Which do you think is better? Discuss including examples from your own knowledge and experience.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Large members of visitors can endanger ancient archeological sites such as Machu Plcchu. In your opinion, is it more important to try to preserve such sites or allow public access to them?

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