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Many cities have installed cameras in public places in order to reduce crime. However, some people think that those cameras restrict our privacy. Do you think the advantages of this system outweigh the disadvantages?

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Whilst some argue that surveillance in public places
are
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 an invasion of privacy, others believe that it helps to reduce and prevent crimes.
This
 essay will discuss the benefits and drawbacks of surveillance
methodes
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methods
such
 as CCTV. In my
opnion
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opinion
, the benefits drastically outweigh the drawbacks. On the one hand,
security
cameras
 help to prevent and solve crimes.
Firstly
, they act as a deterrent for criminals, since the
crime
 will be recorded.
Thus
, reducing the chance of a
crime
 being
commited
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committed
.
Secondly
, if a
crime
 still
occures
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occurs
 it is relatively easy for the police to track down the criminal.
In addition
, the use of
cameras
 in public places has shown to be extremely effective in decreasing criminal activity.
For instance
, in
Singapore
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 almost all public places have
security
cameras
, which has reduced
crime
 rates to almost zero.
On the other hand
, some consider
security
cameras
 to be an invasion of their privacy. Many do not like the idea of being constantly watched. Protection and
security
 is a vital
component
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 of these
cameras
.
However
, sometimes these lead to disgraceful controversies.
For instance
, in the professional
world
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 many employees have complained about their privacy being monitored constantly. In summary, the benefits of
security
cameras
 significantly outweigh the drawbacks.
Neverthless
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Nevertheless
, ethically
this
 topic can be a very
slipperly
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slippery
 slope.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • surveillance
  • deterrence
  • apprehension
  • infringement
  • omnipresence
  • law enforcement
  • evidence gathering
  • privacy concerns
  • surveillance state
  • unwarranted surveillance
  • psychological impact
  • paranoia
  • crime investigation
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