Information technology is changing many aspects of our lives and now dominates our home ,leisure and work activities. To what extent do the benefits of information technology outweight the disadvantages?

Nowadays,
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artificial intelligence has been transformed and dominated
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people
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daily basis from home to office activities.
This
essay will try to identify
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the positives
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positives
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and negatives side of
this
topic. On the one hand,
technology
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of information can increase productivity and reduce unnecessary things to be done. In terms of
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homework
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home work
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,
people
are possible to do multitasking work.
For instance
,
instead
of buying a receipt book in the bookstore, a mother
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to watch tutorial videos on how to cook certain meals while laying on her bed.
Besides
, if many big corporations utilize social
media
to promote their products, it will increase their opportunity to reach their
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target-market
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and high
exposures
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exposure
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of
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countless audiences.
As a result
, their products may be sold as they expected.
On the other hand
, many
people
trapped
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on
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the
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technology
previleges
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privileges
.
Firstly
, as information network is getting happening, it may shape
people
to become ignorant generations which has
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impact
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the future. As a consequence,
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hoax
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will be massively spread in the middle of the community and produce a lot of echo-chamber
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.
Secondly
, if the majority of profitable
business
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are using to take social
media
as their
media
promotion, it would reduce
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chance of live-interaction between the seller and customer. Their customer will have no experience to taste the product directly as well
as
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decrease their loyalty rate. To conclude, social
media
network
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have many advantages like maximizing
people
's time,
however
,
it
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should not rely on one medium,
such
as
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for the sake of earning profits or
to share
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some
informations
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information
pieces of information
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.
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