Information technology is changing many aspects of our lives and now dominates our home ,leisure and work activities. To what extent do the benefits of information technology outweight the disadvantages?

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artificial intelligence has been transformed and dominated

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daily basis from home to office activities.

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essay will try to identify

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the positives

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and negatives side of

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topic. On the one hand,

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of information can increase productivity and reduce unnecessary things to be done. In terms of

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people

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are possible to do multitasking work.

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to watch tutorial videos on how to cook certain meals while laying on her bed.

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, if many big corporations utilize social

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to promote their products, it will increase their opportunity to reach their

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and high

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countless audiences.

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, their products may be sold as they expected.

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, many

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technology

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, as information network is getting happening, it may shape

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to become ignorant generations which has

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the future. As a consequence,

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will be massively spread in the middle of the community and produce a lot of echo-chamber

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, if the majority of profitable

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are using to take social

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promotion, it would reduce

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chance of live-interaction between the seller and customer. Their customer will have no experience to taste the product directly as well

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decrease their loyalty rate. To conclude, social

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network

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have many advantages like maximizing

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's time,

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should not rely on one medium,

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instagram

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for the sake of earning profits or

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some

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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

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Information technology is changing many aspects of our lives and now dominates our home ,leisure and work activities. To what extent do the benefits of information technology outweight the disadvantages?

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

In some countries owning a home rather than renting one is considered very important what are the causes of this? Is this a positive or negative development?

Today many people do not know their neighbours. What are the reasons and solutions for this issues.

Some people think that children should be taught at school to recycle materials and avoid waste. Other people believe that children should be taught this at home. Discuss both opinions and give your own opinion.

In many countries governments are investing in new technology to dealt with the public. Why is this happening? Do you think this is an appropriate use of government money?

A big salary is much more important than job satisfaction.