Some people believe that competitive sports, both team and individual, have no place in the school curriculum. How far do you agree or disagree?

Sports

always be neglected in school. Some people believe that should include in

syllabus

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while other people believe that

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unnecessary. In my perspective, competitive

sports

are

benefit

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to

student

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students

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physical and mental

health

.

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, that

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is

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not

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doubt that spots

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advantage

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an advantage

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to

study

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physical

health

and ability. Every day

do

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appropriate sport can reduce some decease

such

as obesity and heart

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.

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,

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a

health

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body that

increase

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study productivity

on

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the lesson , they are more concentrated.

As a

result

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they can get a better score.

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, it

also

can improve their personal abilities,

such

as communication

skill

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, organization

skill

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and decision making. Those skills are important to them in the future.

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, Competitive

sports

also

benefit

on

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student

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students

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mental development. It can help

student

built

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up their confidence. Confidence children seem to

be have

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greater

able

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to cope with

peers

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stress, drawback,

positive

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and negative

emotion

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.

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one of the most important

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to be

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a success

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success

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.

In addition

, from the

competitice

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competitive

competition

sport

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sports

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student

can build up the relationship between

student

, teacher and parents, as they can receive the support and feel love in

this

community. In

the

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other word,

student

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students

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seem to be more willing to share and participated in some social charity. In conclusion, obviously , competitive

sports

are the basis for students' physical and mental

health

development. The

benefitcial

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beneficial

beneficiary

not relate to

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the student

a student

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student

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but

also

schools

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to schools

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, parents and society. I strongly suggest

school

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schools

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should include competitive

sports

in their syllabus.