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You rent a four-bedroom house, which you share with two other students. However, there are several problems with this house that need fixing. You also find it expensive and would like to find another student to share the spare bedroom. Write a letter to the estate agency. In the letter - Explain your situation - Describe the problems with the house - Say what you would like to happen

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Dear sir or madam, I am writing
this
 letter to express my dissatisfaction
towards
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 the
apartment
 which I rented recently. My name is Upasana rani and i am a tenent at
apartment
 no 42, Basant Vihar. I have been living here since
last
 month with two other students who are my roommates as it is a
specious
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 place to live. There, we
also
 have
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another
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an other
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 spare room which can be shared with another person.
Thus
,
i
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 would request you to allow us to have a new person as one of my friends wants to shift with me. It is not only helpful to pay the expensive rent of
apartment
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 but
also
 helps me in my academic
works
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. That being said, I would catch your attention towards many issues in
apartment
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 which we have to face
everyday
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.
Firstly
, some of
doors
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 and window glasses are cracked and
floor
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the floor
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 tiles of
bathroom
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the bathroom
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 are
also
 chipped.
Moreover
,
drainage
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 system does not work properly as the kitchen sink is blocked
that
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 is why it is stinking. Given the situation, it would be highly appreciatable if you ask our landlord to send someone to fix all these problems because it is
landlord's
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 accountability as per
agreement
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.
otherwise
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 I have left with no option
to
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 leave
this
apartment
. I hope you will understand and cooperate
me
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 in
this
 regard. Yours faithfully, Upasana Rani
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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