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In many countries, mainly tourist, but not local people visit museums and local sites, why does this happen, and what can be done to attract more people to visit these places?

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In many
countries
,most of the visitors to the historical and local
places
 are
foreign
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from foreign
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countries
 and not local
people
.
This
 essay will discuss how
curiorsity
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curiosity
 is the driving
forces
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force
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 for the tourist to
visit
 these sites, and how adding new recreation
places
 will motivate the local
people
 to
visit
 these
places
.
People
visit
 other
countries
 to learn their history and cultures
that
is
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are
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 not in their book. They get curious about the way
people
 lived in other
countries
 and the best way for them to learn about it is through historical
places
 and
museum
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museums
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.
However
, local
people
have
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already
know
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known
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 about them having lived
them
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with them
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 and learnt it from their school.
Therefore
 they find no interest in visiting these
places
.
Moreover
, the entry fees are usually
prices
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priced
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 at
global
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a global
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 rate which can be expensive for the local
people
 to afford.
A
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Research
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research
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 from
Maldives
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the Maldives
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, about 60
percent
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per cent
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 of the visitor to their beach are foreign, and the studies found that the reason that there are
less
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fewer
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 local
people
 is that the prices are too high for the local
people
 to
visit
 One way to attract more local
vistors
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visitors
 is to build more recreational spaces in the historical
places
 to keep them interested. Local
people
 will become more curious about the new
places
 and will
visit
 them.
Moreover
, giving entry
discount
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discounts
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 to the local
people
 will encourage them to
visit
 these
places
.
For example
,
Dubai
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the Dubai
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 government built the largest expo in the world which include all sort of entertainment and history and it is free of cost for the local
people
, it became very successful
quicky
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quickly
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 as local
people
 from all over the country still
visit
to
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apply
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this
 day. In conclusion, there should be more recreational spaces and entry fees discount for the local
people
 to motivate them to
visit
 the historical
places
.
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