These days people in some countries are living in a “throw-away” society which means people use things in a short time then throw them away. Causes and problems.

TASK 2 Nowadays, so many people migrate to foreign countries for greener pastures. Some people are of the opinion that migrating to a western country where you have to express yourself in their
language
has no societal and practical difficulty, but I strongly agree with the idea that it affects the well-being of the individual leading to poor adaptability and low
self esteem
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. In
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Firstly
, participating in any activities will be difficult and can lead to poor adaptation.
For instance
, most western countries speak their dialect in colleges, shops, churches and other places of gathering. When you can not express yourself, it will be so difficult to adapt and mingle with your colleagues at work, school and so on.
In other words
,staying with the citizens and having anything to do with them would be stressful because you cannot express yourself well to them unless you learn their
language
. Another reason why I agree
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starvation and low self-esteem. The inability to enter a shop and purchase whatever you want and
also
being ignored by the shop owner
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many occasions due to the
language
barrier can make one
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look down on oneself and have a feeling of not being welcomed in the city.
Also
, settling in an international country without being familiar with their mother tongue would result
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serious
challenge
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buying food or eating in a restaurant as you can't express yourself to the shop owner which can lead to starvation over a long period of time.
On the other hand
, some disagree that migrating to a developed City without expressing yourself won't be a problem. They believe that English is a universal
language
that no matter where you travel
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globally, you can socialize with them and carry out activities judiciously without stress as they tend to understand that common
language
. Conclusively,
although
it is a common
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that English is being understood both far and wide, I strongly believe that it is necessary to learn the country's native tongue so as to be able to adapt fully and have
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high self-esteem wherever one
migrate
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