To what extent has the traditional male role changed in the last 20 years? Many people believe that women make better parenting than men and that this is why they have the greater role in raising children in most societies. Others claim that men are just as good as women at parenting. Write an essay expressing your point of view. Give reasons for your answer.

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For the previous two decades, some people argue that mothers are excellent at parenting as compared to fathers, for these reasons, they have more responsibilities in bringing up
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in almost all societies in the world. While other members of the populace think
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, that men are equally good as
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women. I strongly believe that both males and females have
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tasks in child upbring as they together take care of the kids and sponsor their bills.
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with, parenthood involves the efforts of the man and the woman, cooperating as a unit helps a lot in catering for the need of the kids. When adults put their heads together, child care becomes a very smooth and easy assignment to accomplish since they will serve as a support system, in the event one could not handle or solve a given problem the other person will give a helping hand.
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, a study carried out by an American based
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renowned
sociologist concluded that 98% of kids raised by the collective collaboration of the two parents were noticed to be better raised
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their counterparts.
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family where responsibilities
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as payment of bills like school fees, accommodation fees etc.
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being shared between
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,
child rearing
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becomes an enjoyable job.
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,
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couple
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will not feel the burden and the stress
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associated with bringing up
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.
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that the burden is distributed across the father and the mother so everyone has a stress
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.
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, a publication in the UK journal of parenthood revealed that most families, about 90% where
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were raised by the combined dedication of the parents had a
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successful
parenting. In conclusion,
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some believe that women play
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vital role in
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the growth
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of
children
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. While some others feel that the father and the mother are equally important in
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children
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development. I vehemently
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the fact that they are significant in
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the same
these
way in that they provide care as well as take up the financial responsibility of the family members.t

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