To what extent has the traditional male role changed in the last 20 years? Many people believe that women make better parenting than men and that this is why they have the greater role in raising children in most societies. Others claim that men are just as good as women at parenting. Write an essay expressing your point of view. Give reasons for your answer.
For the previous two decades, some people argue that mothers are excellent at parenting as compared to fathers, for these reasons, they have more responsibilities in bringing up
children
in almost all societies in the world. While other members of the populace think otherwise
, that men are equally good as the
women. I strongly believe that both males and females have Correct article usage
apply
thesame
tasks in child upbring as they together take care of the kids and sponsor their bills.
Correct your spelling
the same
To begin
with, parenthood involves the efforts of the man and the woman, cooperating as a unit helps a lot in catering for the need of the kids. When adults put their heads together, child care becomes a very smooth and easy assignment to accomplish since they will serve as a support system, in the event one could not handle or solve a given problem the other person will give a helping hand. For example
, a study carried out by an American based renowed
sociologist concluded that 98% of kids raised by the collective collaboration of the two parents were noticed to be better raised Correct your spelling
renowned
as against
their counterparts.
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than
Furthemore
,Correct your spelling
Furthermore
a
family where responsibilities Change preposition
in a
such
as payment of bills like school fees, accommodation fees etc. is
being shared between Change the verb form
are
couple
, Add an article
the couple
a couple
child rearing
becomes an enjoyable job. Add a hyphen
child-rearing
In addition
, Add an article
the couple
a couple
couple
will not feel the burden and the stress Fix the agreement mistake
couples
that is
associated with bringing up children
. Moreso
that the burden is distributed across the father and the mother so everyone has a stress Correct your spelling
More so
free-time
. Correct your spelling
free time
For instance
, a publication in the UK journal of parenthood revealed that most families, about 90% where children
were raised by the combined dedication of the parents had a sucessful
parenting.
In conclusion, Correct your spelling
successful
although
some believe that women play more
vital role in Add an article
a more
growth
of Add an article
the growth
children
. While some others feel that the father and the mother are equally important in children
development. I vehemently Change noun form
children's
aknowledge
the fact that they are significant in Correct your spelling
acknowledge
thesame
way in that they provide care as well as take up the financial responsibility of the family members.tCorrect your spelling
the same
these
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