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Some people think the newly built houses should be the same as the old houses in local areas. Others argue that local authorities should allow people to build houses in their own style. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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In recent decades, our world has become modernized and industrialized. That leads to many negative environmental problems. I totally agree that even though the environment is polluted, most
people
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 do not
care
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 enough about ecological issues.
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 of all, the reason
people
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 do not pay
attention
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 to environmental issues begins with they are too busy in life. In fact, they may find it annoying to be concerned about things that are believed as community responsibilities.
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, the busy life makes them only interested in their own problems and only
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 about comfortable and convenient things. Most
people
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 nowadays only want to know if
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 car is comfortable or if the equipment can meet individual needs, but forget that the environment is heavily polluted due to exhaust gas from gas burning and domestic waste.
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, the consequences of environmental damage
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 place slowly, so
people
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 do not seem to pay much
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about
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 it and they usually think that they have a lot of time so protective actions are not widely carried out.
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, the education about environmental protection in a lot of countries has
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 not received much
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. Students are often only taught
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 books and they do not have much awareness about the environment.
People
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 often think that natural resources
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 as forests, oil,
gas
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and gas
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 will not run out, so they do not pay much
attention
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 to conservation. To sum
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about
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everything that has been started, there
are
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 various
reason
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 why most
people
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 do not
care
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 enough about environmental issues. After all, the polluted earth will
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 cause many difficulties for
people
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.
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, we need to take the time to
care
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 about
problems
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the problems
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 of nature
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 of just selfishly thinking about ourselves.

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