Some people think the newly built houses should be the same as the old houses in local areas. Others argue that local authorities should allow people to build houses in their own style. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

In recent decades, our world has become modernized and industrialized. That leads to many negative environmental problems. I totally agree that even though the environment is polluted, most
people
do not
care
enough about ecological issues.
First
of all, the reason
people
do not pay
attention
to environmental issues begins with they are too busy in life. In fact, they may find it annoying to be concerned about things that are believed as community responsibilities.
In other words
, the busy life makes them only interested in their own problems and only
care
about comfortable and convenient things. Most
people
nowadays only want to know if
this
car is comfortable or if the equipment can meet individual needs, but forget that the environment is heavily polluted due to exhaust gas from gas burning and domestic waste.
In addition
, the consequences of environmental damage
are often take
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place slowly, so
people
do not seem to pay much
attention
about
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it and they usually think that they have a lot of time so protective actions are not widely carried out.
Furthermore
, the education about environmental protection in a lot of countries has
also
not received much
attention
. Students are often only taught
on
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books and they do not have much awareness about the environment.
People
often think that natural resources
such
as forests, oil,
gas
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and gas
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will not run out, so they do not pay much
attention
to conservation. To sum
up
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about
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everything that has been started, there
are
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various
reason
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why most
people
do not
care
enough about environmental issues. After all, the polluted earth will
also
cause many difficulties for
people
.
Therefore
, we need to take the time to
care
about
problems
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the problems
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of nature
instead
of just selfishly thinking about ourselves.
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