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Advertisement is becoming more and more popular in our everyday life . Do you think it is a positive or negative development.

#advertisement #life #development
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In recent times, there has been
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widespread concern about advertisement. Some people allude that marketing
goods
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 and
products
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 is
key
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 tool for the
business
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 industry while others say
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.
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, the positive effects appear to outweigh the drawbacks.
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products
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 is a positive impact on
individuals
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. To start with, perhaps the foremost reason why advertising is a positive impact is that it increases the productivity of any
business
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.
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 implies that it generates revenue for the
business
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 organization as well as the nation at large . When
goods
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 and services are marketed to the public, more income is generated because
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 number of
individuals
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 have information about
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products
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 and
thus
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 purchase them.To illustrate, there was a report in
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 newspaper about 2 weeks ago about the Pulpy drink produced by 5alive company that
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 particular drink has gained
higher
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 number of consumers after it was marketed
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 the television,
social
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 media and on radio stations.
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 it can be demonstrated that marketing
goods
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brings
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 positive influence to the
business
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 world.
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,
commercial
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 has changed the minds of many
individuals
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 as well as the impression they have
for
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 certain commodities . It creates awareness about these
products
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 and
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 enables companies to reach their target market . When
goods
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 are marketed appropriately, it draws people’s attention to buy and
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 gives
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an idea
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 of which particular one is suitable for their needs.
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, in a research conducted on secondary school adolescent girls about their menstrual hygiene and how they manage their monthly flow , most of the respondents said that they got to know about
products
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 that can be used for menstrual flow called sanitary pads and tampons in a competition outside school;
this
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 enables females to keep safe and comfortable throughout their monthly flow .
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, opponents of
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views
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 believe advertisement has negative consequences because it puts pressure on
individuals
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 and makes them
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impulsive
buyer
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buyers
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.
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, research has proven
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 that
advertisement
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advertisements
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 only make people have informed choices and
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 make
them
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 purchase out of their will. In conclusion, ads
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 shown to improve the economy positively despite
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 flaws. It creates awareness of people about certain
products
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 and
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 helps
individuals
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 make choices based on the knowledge or idea they have acquired about
such
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products
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.

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