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Nowadays the way many people interact with each other has changed because of technology affected the types of relationships people make ? has this become a positive or negative development?

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Over the years,
technology
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 has revolutionized the world. There are several ways in which the new communication
technology
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 has influenced
people
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's way of
interaction
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 with
eachother
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each other
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technology
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 affected the types of relationships with
people
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.
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, development has both positive and negative sides of
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, the positive side seems to be more than the negative side.
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on
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, telephones and
internet
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the internet
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 allow
people
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 to interact instantly thereby reducing the distance between them. In
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 way, it allows
people
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 who are staying away from families to be connected all the time. Nowadays, anyone that has access to
internet
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 can create a free social media account and
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 their social networks on these platforms no matter
were
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where
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 on
planet
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the planet
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 they live. To
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, services like zoom, skype , Google meet etc are being used for professional terms. For example, in recent COVID time, when physical services are being used by the teachers for online classes.
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,
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 from home during
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a pandemic
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pandemic
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 is
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 made possible because of these types of
technology
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 development.
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, there are several reasons why the quality of interaction has significantly declined due to
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technology
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 advancement. These days, individuals prefer online chatting rather than face-to-face interaction.
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 kind of communication is disadvantageous for children as they need to socialise more in
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 direction.
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, reports showed that 70%-80% of mothers complained to the authorities about their children's extreme usage of cell phones and the internet. Nowadays, sharing personal information on social media
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effect
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affect
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people
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's privacy.
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,
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technology
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 has some negative effects
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specially
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case
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the case
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 of children. In conclusion, despite some drawbacks, modern
technology
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 has many positive influences on the way
people
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 interact. And it has many benefits which are quite important in today's world.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • technology
  • interact
  • relationships
  • connectivity
  • communication
  • online
  • face-to-face
  • friendships
  • romantic relationships
  • family dynamics
  • positive
  • negative
  • development
  • effects
  • formation
  • ease
  • impacts
  • communities
  • connect
  • interaction
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