In the future, nobody will buy printed newspapers or books because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

I disagree with
this
statement. I think every
media
has
their
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own segmentation even
though
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whether
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that is
a conventional
media
or a new
media
.
Newspaper
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has their own segmentation, the segment of
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the news
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news paper
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newspaper
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is the person who is more detailed oriented and likes to read
an
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in-depth writing about some case. based on the communication theory that I had learned before in my
bachelor
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degree the segment of
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the news
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news paper
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newspaper
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is an adult in the class of high class usually
they
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work as an Entrepreneur or a part of the board of director in a company. I think people still read
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the newspaper
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newspaper
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newspapers
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because they thought
it
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they
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more
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was more
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credible than the online
media
.
newspaper
is written by the certified journalist who knows the ethics
on
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journalism they will always only share the fact for their
news
. in
the
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online
media
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there are many
contributor
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contributors
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to write the
news
even though the spread
news
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in online
media
are
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is
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fast for me personally I have a doubt when reading
an online
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online news
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news
. I
am doubt
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with
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the credibility of the contributors and
also
the validation of the
news
. another reason why I disagree with the statement above is
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because
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the health consideration. sometimes people more easily
to
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get tired when reading online (
book
/
newspaper
).
personally
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I like to read a printed
book
because I can maximize learned from that
book
. I can take
a
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notes directly especially when the
book
is in
English
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language. sometimes when I read a
book
online there are
many
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distraction
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distractions
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from my
phone
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phones
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such
as social
media
notification and etc. there are
many
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reason
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reasons
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why people will still
buying
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buy
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a printed
book
or
newspaper
it just
depend
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depends
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on the needs of each
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customer
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costumer
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customer
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • accessibility
  • convenience
  • cost-effective
  • cultural value
  • sentimental value
  • reliability
  • distracting
  • access to
  • digital devices
  • internet
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