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The different between other countries is less than before because people can consume the same goods anywhere in the world.

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In
this
 contemporary epoch, there is little or no difference between nations and
this
 is because individuals can purchase
same
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the same
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 products in any part of the globe they are situated in. I believe
this
a
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positive development as it
increase
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the country
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country
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country's
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 economy and
improve
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improves
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quality
 of
life
.
To begin
, it is undeniable that recent innovations
has
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make
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made
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 buying and selling of
goods
 to be easier for
people
, what
this
mean
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 is that, with mobile phones and
internet
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the internet
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 that comes with
advent
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the advent
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 of technology
people
 can sit in the comfort of their own home to order
goods
 of great
quality
 as that of any other
country
 online with just a click on the button of their handset and it will be delivered to their doorsteps within hours or days depending on where the
goods
 are imported from.
Hence
,
this
has
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lead
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 to a positive boost
in
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in-country
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the country
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country
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country's
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 economy because
tax
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taxes
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 are been deducted from these services. A recent survey in the department of transportation Nigeria revealed that 30% of government revenue comes from importing and exporting
of
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goods
 and services.
Furthermore
,
machineries
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machinery
types of machinery
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such
 as washing
machine
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machines
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,
dish washers
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dishwashers
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 and so on manufactured in developed countries to make their cleaning easier are
also
 transported to other developing nations, what
this
 implies is that,
people
 can
also
 wash their dirty clothes and kitchen utensils using little or no effort, and
this
 has lead to increase in productivity and
quality
 of
life
.
For instance
, in Nigeria, cleaning
of
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clothes and plates has been considered a realm of women and
this
 has
cause
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caused
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 a larger proportion of married women to age and exhaust easily as compared to their male counterparts who
does
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do
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 not do
this
, but since the advent of
this
machine
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 the workload on them has drastically reduced,
subsequently
, leading to better and refreshing
life
. In conclusion, there has been
a
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growing
similarities
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 between countries as compared to the past.
This
 is because
people
 can buy and sell the same
goods
 produced
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from
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form
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from
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 anywhere in the
country
 to and from anywhere on their continent.
Therefore
, boosting the
country
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country's
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 revenue and better
quality
 of
life
.

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