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The different between other countries is less than before because people can consume the same goods anywhere in the world.

#countries #people #goods #world
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In
this
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 contemporary epoch, there is little or no difference between nations and
this
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 is because individuals can purchase
same
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 products in any part of the globe they are situated in. I believe
this
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a
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positive development as it
increase
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the country
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country
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country's
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 economy and
improve
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quality
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 of
life
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.
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, it is undeniable that recent innovations
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make
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 buying and selling of
goods
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 to be easier for
people
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, what
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mean
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 is that, with mobile phones and
internet
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the internet
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 that comes with
advent
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 of technology
people
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 can sit in the comfort of their own home to order
goods
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 of great
quality
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 as that of any other
country
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 online with just a click on the button of their handset and it will be delivered to their doorsteps within hours or days depending on where the
goods
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 are imported from.
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,
this
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has
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lead
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 to a positive boost
in
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in-country
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the country
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country
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country's
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 economy because
tax
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taxes
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 are been deducted from these services. A recent survey in the department of transportation Nigeria revealed that 30% of government revenue comes from importing and exporting
of
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goods
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 and services.
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,
machineries
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machinery
types of machinery
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such
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 as washing
machine
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machines
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,
dish washers
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 and so on manufactured in developed countries to make their cleaning easier are
also
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 transported to other developing nations, what
this
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 implies is that,
people
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 can
also
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 wash their dirty clothes and kitchen utensils using little or no effort, and
this
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 has lead to increase in productivity and
quality
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 of
life
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.
For instance
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, in Nigeria, cleaning
of
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clothes and plates has been considered a realm of women and
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 has
cause
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 a larger proportion of married women to age and exhaust easily as compared to their male counterparts who
does
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do
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 not do
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, but since the advent of
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machine
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 the workload on them has drastically reduced,
subsequently
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, leading to better and refreshing
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. In conclusion, there has been
a
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growing
similarities
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 between countries as compared to the past.
This
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 is because
people
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 can buy and sell the same
goods
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 produced
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from
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form
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from
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 anywhere in the
country
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 to and from anywhere on their continent.
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, boosting the
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country
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country's
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 revenue and better
quality
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 of
life
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.

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