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Creative artists should always be given the freedom to express their own ideas (in words, pictures, music or film) in whichever way they wish. There should be no government restriction on what they do To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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In recent days, the governments have to without any procedure for the creative
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 ought to always be done their own ideas to feel free whichever means
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 as music, film and words and pictures whatever they want.
This
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 essay totally disagrees with
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 statement because there are two primary reasons which are associated not only watchers young
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 without
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 but
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 with many poor contents. In
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 essay, I intend to discuss both these views.
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 of all, I completely believe that some of the
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 directly to most of the adults like +18. Put more simply, that content for adults is always put on most TV channels.
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, young
children
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 catch up with their immortal contents and follow their procedures.
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 of the perfect examples of
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 is most of their young
children
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 are affected by social media
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 as Youtube, Tiktok, Facebook, Instagram etc. in the big country of Mongolia called Khuvsgul
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2019.
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, their statement new policy for
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 statement which men that if
children
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 are under 16 years old they must be used for Youtube kids it is systemic just for kids their age in 2020.
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 and even more importantly though the government have to do censorship creative artist because human kinds follow them and imitate every single character.
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 to say that more quality
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 should be born in our society.
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, more and more
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 and their responses should be great and creative in their conversations with each other.
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 particularly good example of
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 is in South Korea most of their new artist should to a high ability for many things and for many years they prepared for just
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 thing.
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 of the most famous bands in the world from Korean k-pop is called BLACK PINK they have a member of 4
people
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. Those 4
people
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 had been prepared for 8 years to be
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 that band most famous in the world with the multiple skilled
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. By way of conclusion, I once again restate my view that government should be restriction the age of young
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 followed channels and poor content for the creative artist.
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