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Many manufactured food and drink products contain high levels od sugar, which causes many health problems. Sugary products should be made more expensive to encourage people to consume less sugar. Do you agree or disagree?

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More and more
people
 are addicted to sugar because the many manufactured contained many sources of
food
 with high levels of sugar, which means
people
 became health problems day by day. Some
people
 suggest that sugary
products
 should be more expensive, so
people
 would buy less of them.
This
 essay totally disagrees with
this
 statement. There are two primary reasons which are associated with poor family economics and inflation. In
this
 essay, I intend to discuss both these views.
First
 of all, I completely believe that If there are put more expensive
food
products
such
 as bread and milk some poor
people
 can’t buy their daily life
food
 items. Put more simply some homeless or poor
people
 consume just 2,3 pieces of bread one day.
As a result
, they might be starving eventually, and they might be circumstances to die. One of the particularly good examples of
this
 is that some relief companies
such
 as Red gross always help poor
people
 and poor countries like Africa. They send
food
products
 if we get expensive sugary
products
 they couldn’t help the poor
people
 and pathetic children as well .
Secondly
 and even more importantly though government accepted that suggest it might be inflation everywhere wide in the country.
That is
 to say that all the different kinds of
products
 and goods follow the higher price.
Consequently
, their
people
 seem like exhausted from everything they can’t overcome
this
 situation and it would be
people
 prepare to rebel and demonstration. One of the perfect examples of
this
 is the Mongolian government all of the
products
 put higher prices because they don’t have any export
food
products
 they always import their product from China and Russia.
However
, their
people
 got angry and demonstrated their Governments. By way of conclusion, I once again restate my view that around the worldwide don’t be permitted higher price for a source of sugar
products
 ,especially their daily life product.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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