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Some people believe that education trip or excursion helps promote overall holistic learning. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

#people #education #trip #excursion
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 of
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 it is known that
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 to improve the ability of the
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 agree to be one of the most powerful ways by which
students
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 other advantages sure as improving understanding
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 a particular subject or topic, it
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students
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be vast on not limited to what is written in the test books or what was thought in the
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class room
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 or the
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lecture
 hall.
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excursions
 and academic trip improves the ability of scholars to learn and
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improve
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understanding of the topics that
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 thought in school.
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research was carried out
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 Barnes university on history
students
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 the learning ability of
students
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excursions
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class room
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 only. The result shows that the scholars that engage in
excursions
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area
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study
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also
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academic
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study
. It makes
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 making them vast in
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study
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 when a nursing student in training is being posted to more than one hospital unit for practicals,
this
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also
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students
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class
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engaged
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excursions
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introduces
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lecture
 learnt other aspects that
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 not thought in their
class room
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. In
conclusion
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 totally argue that exposing
students
 and scholars to
excursions
 and academic trips makes the
students
to
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be more vast and
also
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understand
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in
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they
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study
.

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