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Some people believe that education trip or excursion helps promote overall holistic learning. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

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 to improve the ability of the
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 agree to be one of the most powerful ways by which
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 it promote easy learning,
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 or the
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lecture
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 and academic trip improves the ability of scholars to learn and
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understanding of the topics that
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 thought in school.
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 the learning ability of
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 only. The result shows that the scholars that engage in
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 excursion
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introduces
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class room
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. In
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 totally argue that exposing
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 and academic trips makes the
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be more vast and
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improves
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understand
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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