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In many countries schools have severe problems with student behaviour. What do you think are the causes of this? What solution can you suggest

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Nowadays, some schools have hard issues with communication with each other and the students in the global. The main problem of
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 causes can be irresponsible
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 and the possible solution would be
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 the best way to solve it. The primary difficulty is that most of the
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 are busy all the time without time to spend with their young ones to talk to some specific and their behaviour things which means they suppose their kids want to just need wealth life.
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 is because their kids seem lonely without someone
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, it must be much more harassment of the youngsters for some the discrimination and bullying of some of the other children.
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 of the perfect examples of
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 in Sydney during the ester celebrating show several of the youngster guys between 14-17years old boys fighting each other and
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 stabbing each other so the result is the
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 16 years old boy poor died that situation is the who stabbed that boy run away among millions of people. The criminal
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the witness. The criminal boy was approved without any love and care from their
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 by the police. In order to solve these ,matters the school directors and teachers should be adding their lesson
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 day a week for their all students.
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 to say that every single school student has any problems
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 as arguing with friend and family and their love story etc.
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, young ones discuss
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share their secret thing with their
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.
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 particularly good example of
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 is in the Netflix series of the name Sex Education which series among the school kids face some sex issue and how to do it.
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 guy gave some reasonable advice to students like a
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's advice.
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 why every single student became without any problem and they are perfectly behaviour for themselves. By way of the conclusion, I once restate my view that ever there are some problems related to lack of care like irresponsible
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 or their care people it can be easily addressed through discussion with the majority.
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