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Some people think high school graduates should travel or work for a period of time instead of going directly to study at university. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of both approaches.

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When people graduated from high school, most of them go straight to
university
 but some of them take a
gap
year
 for traveling or working.
However
, there are the advantages and the disadvantages of period time. The upcoming paragraphs will analyze the benefits and drawbacks of
this
 that contribute to
this
 affirmation, as well as my personal opinions.
Firstly
, the great advantage of taking a
gap
year
 is that it enables students to take a break from the education system in order to do something that they are interested in
such
 as travelling and working.
Secondly
, they could receive many experiences from taking a
gap
year
 before going to
university
, maybe it would help them to make a decision about the major which they will study in
university
. The main disadvantage of a taking a
gap
year
 is late graduating from
university
although
 it is not an important issue if they are finding a job in the future, the interviewer might have a question about
this
gap
year
 Another drawback of taking a
gap
year
 is that if people want to go travel
instead
 of going to college, they might spend more money to do
this
 than spend money in college. They should be aware of
this
 carefully if you don’t want to have trouble. In conclusion, the advantages of taking a
gap
year
 are taking a break from the education system and receiving many experiences before going to
university
. While the disadvantages of
this
 are that late graduating from the academy and might spend money to do
this
.
However
, people should know about the plus points and downside of
this
 before they will make a decision.
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