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Film stars and celebrities often share their views on public matters that have little to do with their profession. Is this a positive or negative development?

In today’s modern world, nearly all
people
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 have the chance to
share
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 their opinions with
others
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 easily. It is clear that Cinema stars and
celebrities
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 are not excepted, so they can express their
views
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 to
society
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 through their social
media
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 accounts. Some believe that
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 it is an unpleasant development that might have negative effects on
society
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. On the other side, some
people
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 argue that all
society
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 members have the right to
share
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 their
views
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 on every matter with
others
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. In the following
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 we will consider both
views
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 to draw a clear conclusion.
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, it should not be neglected that
celebrities
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 have the privileges of social
media
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 with a huge number of followers. In fact, every opinion they
share
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 with
others
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 is accepted by their fans even though it is a fault point of
view
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.
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, they can impress the audience with their thoughts even if they do not have much knowledge about an issue of concern in
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society
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.
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, recently, a famous celebrity in America talked about
Covid-19’s
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vaccination
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 possible dangers and most of the given information was incorrect, unfortunately.
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, these
people
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 might lead
society
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 and especially their followers to make wrong decisions due to the spread of false news. On the opposite
view
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, some folks believe that all the members of the
society
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 have the right to
share
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 their
views
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 in public. In fact, everyone has a
share
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 in public matters so they can show their position and express their point of
view
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 to
others
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 whether they are ordinary
people
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 or
celebrities
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. Based on social facts, there is always the possibility that
people
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 can present useful ideas and solutions even though the considered issue is not related to their profession.
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, during the economical crisis in America, some film stars could persuade investors to invest in new Holywood projects, which
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 resulted in huge profits for investors and
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 the government.
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 the presented solutions did not relate to their profession, the results were satisfying. In conclusion, there is a belief which states that
celebrities
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 should not
share
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 their
views
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 on public issues other than their profession;
however
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, I think that every
view
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 published in
society
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 must be respected unless it is proved to be wrong. I believe that everyone in
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society
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 including
celebrities
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 has the right to
share
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 their
views
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 on every matter. Meantime, I recommend authorities on social
media
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 develop a solution which prevents false content to be published on the
media
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.

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Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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