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Some experts believe that it is better for children to begin learning a forerign language in primary school rather than secondary school do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

#experts #children #forerign #language #school #outweigh
A few skilled
person's
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 argue it is more beneficial to learn a new
language
 in elementary
school
instead
 of high
school
.
This
 agrees that the drawbacks of
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 taught another
language
supercedes
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supersedes
 the benefit
with
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 reasons that would be explained in
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 paragraphs.
To begin
, starting off
foreign
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a foreign
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language
 in primary
school
 would be cumbersome.
This
 is because there are other complex core subjects
such
 as mathematics,science,
health
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 education they are learning at
this
 stage,
therefore
 including another subject would result in poor academic performance.
In addition
,some pupils might develop phonological interference in the process and slow down their speech.The reason is at
this
 stage,they are trying to speak their mother tongue flawlessly.These pupils
ends
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 up mixing up
pronunciation
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 of words.
for example
 a
neighbor's
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 child
is
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mixes up the pronunciation of words like lice for rice,
piver
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river
liver
 for fever.
Hence
 it is necessary it is included
to
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 the secondary curriculum.
However
, during
this
 age and stage in the development of a child,the brain is very much receptive to
learn
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learning
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 new things and a
second
language
 is not excluded.
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In fact
 in elementary
school
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,school
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 their interest
for
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 learning is at its peak.
For instance
, in Nigeria recently most private schools included
french
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the french
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language
to
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 their academic scheme and before their graduation they are able to speak french fluently.
As a
result
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 they can easily communicate with
french
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the french
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 speaking
individual
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. In conclusion,
i
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 believe that the demerits of teaching a
second
language
 in elementary
school
superpasses
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surpasses
super passes
 the merits,
thus
 it should be discouraged.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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