Some people think that couples should live together before getting married to start knowing each other better and see if they are compatible. Others say that because of this tendency people become immoral and only deep emotional attachment makes a durable alliance. What is your opinion?

In recent times, the idea of cohabitation by partners before
marriage
have
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concern. While some
people
believe that
this
approach promotes compatibility discovery, others are of the opinion that it encourages immorality and weak bond. I agree with the
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later
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view because
of
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some reasons
such
as : Living together does not create room for building strong emotional connections, it promotes the
spread
of STIs/ HIV and
also
it encourages immoral
practice
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in the society.
Firstly
, when Lovers Cohabits before their
marriage
they may not have the ample opportunity to build strong intimacy which is required for a lasting
marriage
.
In other words
, living together before
marriage
increases the chances of early divorce and
this
could be attributed to the fact that quality relationships and friendship
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better built when
people
are living apart because
over familiarity
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breeds contempt . A survey done in Nigeria has revealed that the chances of divorce
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higher among couples that Cohabited before they got married
also
another negative effect of living together before
marriage
is that it promotes immorality.
This
means that when the opposite sex stays together in a house, they most likely may engage in premarital sex which is one of the social vices in the society so it is better they live apart until they are officially wedded.
Moreover
,
this
practice
can promote the
spread
of sexually transmitted diseases and HIV as most
people
rarely go for medical
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and investigations once they start living together and may not
also
be able to
practice
safe sex.
This
implies that the
spread
of
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sexual
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transmitted
disease
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may be notably high among Cohabiting couples and the evidence could be seen in surveys which stated that
these
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disease
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spread
is
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more among partners
which
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cohabited before
marriage
. In conclusion, though some
people
believe that the act of living together
of
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couples before their official wedding encourages compatibility discovery, I am of the opinion that cohabitation does not give room for building strong intimacy
hence
divorce is inevitable, it
also
promotes immoral
practice
in the society and could as well lead to
increase
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in the
spread
of HIV and other sexually transmitted diseases and so should be discouraged.

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