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The number of children that read books for fun has dropped dramatically in recent years. What are the reason for this? How can we encourage children to read more?

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Due to the development of technology nowadays, a great number of
children
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 tend to spend most of their
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 using electronic devices which can lead to the decline of the number of those reading
books
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 for the purpose of entertainment. In
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 essay, I will discuss the reasons for
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 serious issue as well as the way to tackle
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.
To begin
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 with, there are two major reasons for
children
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 to use up-to-date devices
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 of reading
books
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.
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 and foremost,
parents
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 cannot afford enough
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 to create reading
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 with their
children
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.
In other words
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,
parents
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 need to work extra hours in order to make ends meet so that they are not patient and have no
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 enough to choose the
books
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 and read to their
children
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.
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, it is clear that a variety of child-oriented channels that can attract
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's attention are available on social platforms.
For example
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, a channel like youtube has a different number of interesting videos for variable age groups. Those videos can definitely overwhelm the
children
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 more than
books
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 as
books
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 are normally more outdated than the clips and films on social websites. On the other that, the group of people, especially
parents
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 and teachers are able to help the
children
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 read more
books
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instead
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 of spending their
time
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 on social media. The way that the
parents
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 help their
children
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 is that they have to make sure to give reading moments to their
children
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 no matter how busy they are, which means that they at least read bedtime stories to their
children
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 every night. As for the teachers, they ought to prioritize the reading hours than giving lectures and taking them to the school library
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 of the multimedia classroom. In conclusion, it is undeniable that the updated devices grab the young
children
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's attention so much that they are likely to ignore the
books
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, their real friends. In my opinion, I suppose that obsession can be cured with the help of people especially teachers and students in their environment.
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