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Causes and effects of using smartphones and tablet on young children.

#effects #smartphones #tablet #children
In the past,
smartphones
 and tablets weren't universal in the world, nowadays many countries have technology products that can
use
 them.
the
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technological growth could be brought
life
 convenience and advantages,
such
 as you could easily make
use
 of
smartphone
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a smartphone
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 search engine to
know
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acknowledge or app software,
its
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 change ,
anyone
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life
 in
the
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society,now we will talk about
smartphones
 and tablets and how they influence young
children
. "
Smartphone
 abuse interferes with all activities in daily
life
. Young people who tend to have a
smartphone
 addiction (SA)
also
 have social, familiar and academic problems.” (Conte, S et al.2022),regarding the above ,research we could know technological products influence in our
life
 particular to young
children
,
smartphones
 have many app software the app can
use
 it and have a variety of convenient function if you want you could download on the desktop phone,but the"
Smartphone
 is useful for communication, work, socialization and to get information, but its overuse could cause serious and problematic consequences" (Al-Barashdi et al., 2015; Chóliz, 2010).
Therefore
,when
the
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young
children
use
it
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smartphones
 and tablets should be appropriate limited
use
 time,
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the parents make sure not
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to overuse
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overuse
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overuse them
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 (Walsh et al., 2007),so appropriate
use
 it could bring to benefit young
children
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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