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In the past, when students did a university degree, they tended to study in their own country. Nowadays, they have more opportunity to study aboard. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this development?

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In recent years,
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 of people
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have chosen
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 to
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develop
 their
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knowledge
studying
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by studying
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 around the world. Without
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differences
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 of nationality, you can apply to study in every part of the planet, as
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long as suitable for you.
Peoples
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can significantly change their
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 studying abroad, many of them
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 that they spent the best moment in life,
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really
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. In the essay below I will discuss the vantages and disadvantages , whereupon I'll explain my
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point
 of view.
Approach
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in
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 another
culture
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 is always the key to
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 more skills,
culture
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 and
grow
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. You can find the master adapt to yourself or the
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specific
 study that you want
follow
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 to create a professional
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career
. In terms of
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, you can become
self sufficient
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 and arrange yourself in different
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 of situations, learn a new language and find things that your country of
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origin
 doesn't have.
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, for many people is not simple
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at
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culture
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. Many of them cannot survive
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the
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 shock, despite
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 and habitat can be
cause
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the cause
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 of stress,anxiety and in some cases depression. From my point of view ,
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adapting
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 yourself
at
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a
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 new
culture
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 is the basic experience to have a personal
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change
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, we cannot improve our
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behaviour
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 without
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. Being alone we can learn how to deal with our emotions
efficently
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efficiently
and maximise the result in terms of goals ,
ambitions
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and ambitions
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. In
conclusion
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 I think that
study
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studying
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 abroad has more
vantages
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advantages
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 than advantages because I lived abroad for many years and It changed my life in
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a positive
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.
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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