Some people say that the best way to improve public health is by increasing the number of sports facilities. Others, however, say that this would have little effect on public health and that other measures are required. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
These days
people
usually get sick easily, Some people
believe that,
playing any kind of sport can help Remove the comma
apply
to
public Change preposition
apply
health
, but some nations disagree and say it is not enough. This
essay will talk about both views.
On the one hand, We live in a country that has a lot of economic problems and this
is one of the biggest concerns of my country’s people
so
, It is necessary to think of a solution so that these pressures and stress do not cause irreparable damage to human Correct word choice
apply
health
. Exercising routinely boosts your metabolism and burns fat and extra calories and also
decrease
tension. Correct subject-verb agreement
decreases
Therefore
, Increasing sports places such
as clubs and parks can encourage people
to play sports. For example
, A person who goes for a walk daily,
will be affected after a while because walking helps control anger and reduce stress.
On the other side, some Remove the comma
apply
nation
think exercise must be accompanied by a proper diet, Fix the agreement mistake
nations
otherwise
it is useless. No matter how much you exercise, eating fatty foods and alcohol along with it is completely futile. Add a comma
,otherwise
Also
for having a healthy life you should avoid some habits such
as smoking too. For instance
, If we look at cancer statistics, the percentage of patients who smoke and eat fast food is higher.
To conclude, To have a public health
and fit body, you should have a package of good behaviors
Change the spelling
behaviours
such
as exercise, diet, enough
sleep and do all these together because bad habits that some Correct word choice
and enough
people
have in their lives affecting
their physical Wrong verb form
affect
health
, also
affect their mental health
too.Submitted by TUTOO on
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