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There was a time when people only shopped out of necessity, but these days shopping seems to have become a new form of leisure activity. People don't appreciate the value of money anymore. To what extent dou you agree with this view?

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Earlier,
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 use to save each and every penny to buy something for themselves. Nowadays the whole era of shopping is changed and become modernized. Some
people
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 believe that shopping has become a form of leisure activity and
people
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 don`t understand the
value
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 of
money
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. I totally agree with the statement and
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 think that appreciation of
money
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 has become worthless.
Money
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 is something that everyone should care for as, without ,
money
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 life becomes very difficult.
People
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 are developing a habit of shopping in their spare time.
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,
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 habit of shopping leads to massive wastage of
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 as well as time. Especially, women are very fond of shopping sometimes,they tend to shop for hours unnecessarily.
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,
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 type of unnecessary shopping turns out to have an abundance of wasteful items which are not even required. ,
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this
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 can lead to having a bad impression on one`s child and in future he/she may
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 develop
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 bad habit and have no
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 for
money
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. In recent times, shopping has become even more easy and handy where anyone can shop anywhere. The help of online sites like Myntra, Amazon , etc which can be operated through our mobile phones or laptops has made shopping much easier. But
people
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 tend to use
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 technological advancement in a wrong way, by ordering many items which are not useful or not even required, plus these all online sites have exciting offers for
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 which adds to the point that
people
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 would shop more and forget the
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 of
money
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.
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, my cousin's sister who is fond of shopping recently ordered four dresses for her which were worthless as she bought two dresses
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 week her parents scolded her. ,
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 she passes her spare time scrolling down the online shopping apps whereas, she doesn`t want anything to buy. In a nutshell, I would like to conclude that,
people
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 should not become habitual in shopping
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, they should shop whenever needed just like in old times.
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,
people
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 should realize the
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 of
money
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 and not waste it.

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