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Some people say that individuals should change jobs during their working life often while others believe that doing the same job has advantages to individuals, companies, and society. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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People have different opinions about switching
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occupations, some individuals think that professionals should find
a new work
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 after some time while others
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 under the impression that keeping the same
employement
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employment
 has its own benefits for themselves, organizations and their surroundings. I agree with both the points.
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 benefits why some human beings have a belief that individuals should upgrade to a new profession.
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 with, by finding a new job,
one
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 could explore new opportunities as after spending
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 time
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 the same project,
one
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 gets comfortable with the work and the learning curve gets linear.
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, according to
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 recent survey, professionals who switch their job more frequently are more technically sound.
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, when humans upgrade to a new organization, they get more salary than the ones who have
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same
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 years of experience but have not switched their jobs. On the other side, staying in the same work has its own advantages.
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,
one
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 can get more understanding of their project and have good command over the domain and that can help the companies to retain their legacy projects as
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client
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clients
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 can't get people with good domain knowledge easily.
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, by spending
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 long time with
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 company, a professional can move to
leadership
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the leadership
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 ladder more quickly as they have more knowledge about the functioning and processes.
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, my manager got his managerial role at the experience of 10 years because he has joined as
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. To conclude, keeping in mind the above-mentioned points, it is evident that both the
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view points
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viewpoints
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 have equal significance and its subjective to
one
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's priorities.
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